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Okay, so as some of you know, i am writing an argument research paper over the negative attitude and stereotypes of cigar smokers and the smoking laws and bans that affect our economy and OUR way of life for my english class.

i cannot for the life of me come up with a title!!!! and many brothers also wanted to read the finished product. So, i am going to post my paper in this thread and whoever wants to read it and post their idea for a title (or any other helpful suggestions) may do so! whichever title i think is the best-fitting................................................that person gets a nice fiver from me!!! :clap:

thanks guys, and good luck! i really appreciate it :tiphat:

(i have left out citations and things like that for the ease of reading)

Should a person be punished for doing what they do to relax and blow off steam? Should the government be allowed to single out a minority to tax higher than the rest of the people? Are we as citizens allowed to be told what we can and cannot do for enjoyment and entertainment? These are questions that the people who have been given the negative label of “cigar smokers” find themselves asking in the wake of a dispute that has been going on for more than fifty years. A dispute between men who love their cigars and the rights they deserve and the federal government who sees the tobacco industry as another pocket to get their hand into. The taxes and programs aimed to regulate and downsize the cigar and tobacco industry by the federal government is not only borderline unconstitutional, but unfair and unjust as well.

Dave is a twenty-nine year old college professor and avid cigar smoker and enthusiast. He smokes a cigar a day minimum. After a long day’s work at his university, it is how he relaxes, blows off steam, and prepares himself for the next day. Much like some people come home, pour a soda and sit on the couch with the television remote, Dave chooses to enjoy a cigar; That is the best way he can think of to relax. Is that any better or any worse than junk food and television?

There are many misconceptions behind cigars and their not-so-close relatives: cigarettes. Cigars in fact have the lowest nicotine content of any and all tobacco products out there. Yes, your high school health teacher was wrong when they told you that one cigar has as much nicotine and chemicals in it as an entire pack of cigarettes. You do not inhale cigars; ergo no smoke gets into your lungs. Yes there is the slight chance of throat cancer, however very hard to obtain unless you are a three cigar-a-day person. And finally: Yes, there is a huge difference between those awful Swisher Sweets and a nice premium cigar. Swisher, and Black and Mild uses the same type of tobacco as many cigarette makers and even inject their own nicotine and chemicals into them; they are more or less a big cigarette wrapped in brown paper. A real cigar consists of tobacco and nothing else.

The tobacco can come from a variety of places, but mainly from South American countries. The big four are Nicaragua, Honduras, the Dominican Republic, and Mexico. The industry has come a long way since the early 1900’s. Locals in the countries of the origin of the particular cigar company produce the cigars by hand, using very little machinery to this day. They work all day every day, for just a few dollars a day. South American countries rely on their tobacco exports to keep their economy afloat. The more the American government taxes the tobacco, the more the countries producing it will hurt from the decrease in sales. While our government thinks they are protecting us and keeping us safe, they are really hurting our economy and the economy of other countries that rely on the American purchases of tobacco.

In the early 1900’s, cigars were a much bigger part of life than they are now. The first law about the production of tobacco was actually a law ordering farmers to grow it to keep up with its rising popularity. Cigars were a tool used to bring people together for conversation and family gatherings. Baseball games were over-crowded with cigar smokers. Many government officials smoked them, regardless of their party alignment. That is one reason that there is such a negative outlook on members from one party to the other. Cigars brought great people together, regardless of their political views; they were a means by which things got accomplished and by which people socialized. It was not uncommon for a person to walk down the street, cigar in hand, and be greeted by everyone around him; the cigar carried a sense of friendliness and wisdom in a person. In today’s world, if someone were to walk down the street with a lit smoke, people would most likely have a much more belligerent attitude towards the person. Thanks to the government’s propaganda and anti-smoking campaigns, cigar smokers now have the same negative connotation as cigarette smokers and even drug and alcohol abusers.

This brings us to another important question: Given that cigars have the lowest nicotine content of any other tobacco product, should they be lumped into the same category as cigarettes and smokeless tobacco? Since 2009, President Obama has signed many pieces of legislation determining where a person can and cannot smoke. The liberals in the house and senate would ultimately like to get rid of the cigar bars, lounges, and smoke shops all together even though they will never admit to it. As of 2011, there are still eleven states that do not have a uniform state-wide smoking ban; Indiana is one of them. Next in the eleven closest to Indiana is Kentucky; no surprise there, they used to be the leading state in tobacco exports just a few years ago. Other states include Texas, Wyoming, Mississippi, Missouri, Alabama, Alaska, Oklahoma, South Carolina, and Virginia. As we look at the states who have no uniform ban on smoking, there seems to be something in common within all eleven states: For the vast majority of the time, these states have remained conservative republican states. It is not a surprise then that under a newly formed democratic-controlled government we are seeing more and more smoking bans and regulations take hold all over the country. Many cigar smokers feel that they should be kept under a separate category.

Although the government thinks that it is using deterrence effectively and keeping us safe through the use of more bans and laws that restrict smoking, they are in turn hurting the economy that they promise to promote when they take office. In 2010, an estimated one billion dollars was spent on premium cigars alone. While this number doesn’t come anywhere close to what is spent on cigarettes each year, most people would say that is a good thing. That one billion was spent both at cigar shops and lounges, as well as online retailers. The tax collected on all those sales is in the tens of billions range. The government then puts that money back into whatever they feel as necessary expenditures; roads and highways, the education system, and the most recent: the healthcare reform system. It is now understandable why cigar smokers think they should not be punished for something that is nearly harmless. More and more cigar enthusiasts are writing to their legislators, bringing to light these statistics and facts. While it has made somewhat of a difference, there is still much work to be done to reverse this false stereotype. You are more likely to be killed on a golf course by a stray ball than you are from smoking cigars.

Should our government place harsh bans and restrictions on something that is nearly harmless if done responsibly? Why are cigarettes and cigars in the same category when clearly cigars contain none of the things that the government doesn’t want you to be exposed to? Cigars used to be a way of life, community, and recreation. Now, they are looked down upon. Where will our ‘protectors’ draw the line? Are they going to start banning golfing because there is a risk of getting hit by a ball or getting a sunburn? There is a fine line between enjoying a cigar and smoking a cigarette. Cigarette smokers have to smoke, while cigar smokers get to smoke. It is a privilege of enjoyment that has been a part of the lives of many Americans for years, and now that life-long hobby is threatened by a governing body who thinks they know what is best for its constituents.
 

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Honestly, I think you will need more than a title if you're going to turn this in for a grade....

You're making some incredibly sweeping generalizations, and assuming provocative accusations with absolutely zero references. Plus, some of the statements you've made are complete falsehoods, for instance, how does an industry earn a billion dollars, and yet is taxed in the tens of billion dollar range?

Maybe you could turn it into a satirical piece?

"you gotta fight for your right to party"?
 
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"Guilt By Association: How Cigar Smokers Get The Short End of The Stick"

"Throwing The Baby Out With the Bath-Water: How cigar and cigarette smokers differ"

Paul, you have some great things going for this paper. Your knowledge and passion for the subject matter are clear. But you might want to consider the following....


1) Remember your audience. Ultimately, this is a paper about advocacy and given the context and being reference-driven, it's a little too "informal." (IMHO) "Blowing off steam" is an expression that is very different from "this person finds enjoyment and comfort in the ritual(s) (learning about, selecting, and enjoying) and camaraderie of cigar smoking." You could use words like "restorative, therapeutic, relaxation, enjoyment." Formality, at least when it comes to an argument and academia, is typically associated with credibility.

2) Don't get caught up in stereotypes or your own bias towards cigarette smokers. You may want to speak to this point DIRECTLY and the consequences of buying into that and how cigar smokers/businesses/long traditions (both personal and cultural) have suffered due to said bias.

3) You have to address the issue of second-hand smoke. You don't want cigar smokers to be associated, "punished," or oppressed like cigarette smokers have been, right? So how are you going to show that cigar smokers are different and their rights should be unfettered as long as they don't encroach on the health of others.

4) Identify the population, issue/problem, how it is unfair or short-sighted (whether it be freedom of choice or economical issues), and, if it's part of the paper, a viable solution that FORMALLY ADDRESSES problems you have previously identified.

Paul, it's all there, you just need to shape it a little and give it some depth while making sure you don't fall into a common trap of stereotypes/bias, which you are fighting against. Just remember, at the heart of bias is being able to adjust our frame of reference for a group so we can justify or feel good about our choices. Smoker's are demonized so THEY CAN BE taxed, segregated, and isolated from "non-smokers" (good people).

Ok, done rambling. Just my .01.

GOOD LUCK!
 
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Enjoying a Cigar: The Good, The Bad, and The Unfair

I agree this project needs some more depth to the specific points you are bringing up. While reading this I have questions about the facts being brought up because of the lack of depth. I wouldn't use "sayings" in a project like this. The cigar community is more than just men too. Its missing a good flow because it seems like you are jumping in your arguments. You are not going to win anybody with a comparison between a soda drinker and cigar smoker. Keep at it bro. Represent.
 

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Paul, you are doing good and TheGreekOne has some great suggestions. I also think there is more than a "fine line" between cigar and cigarette smoking.
Title: You can't handle the truth. Cigarette and Cigar smokers stereotyped.
 

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Some of the guys have already pointed out what I initially thought when I read it...it needs more. It left me feeling like you'd just scratched the surface. I assume your instructor has given some length restrictions? If so, I think there is certainly scope to rework some stuff and if not there is definitely places to incorporate more. For my English Comp class in college I had to write a research paper. Unfortunately we did not get to choose our subject and I was saddled with writing about sexual molestation in the church...Lord knows that's a topic an 18 year old wants to be writing about. Any way, our papers had to be at least 3000 words. Mine finally ended up being somewhere around 8 pages with references and all that. It's a lot of work for sure, but this is a topic you care about so should be pretty fun at least. Sorry can't help much with a title, I was never very good at that myself. Keep up the good work :thumbsup:.

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I agree with the others' suggestions. With some slight revisions this could be a powerful piece. Maybe you could post it as a blog entry when you are finished with it?
 

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You've got good ideas, but are lacking structure and direction. You have great intro paragraph, but it is in 4 different places.

Do you have an outline?

I'm no English major and sucked at writing papers, until......I figured out that skipping the outline phase was creating more work later.

By creating a good outline, you establish a road map for your paper. And it's much easier "stack" your paragraphs, thoughts, and topics properly.

You can expand on your outline until almost, if not everything you want to say is listed right there. Then all you have to do is add some punctuation and grammar to it.



I. INTRODUCTION:
* Thesis:_____________________________________________________.

II. BODY PARAGRAPH 1:
* Opening Sentence:___________________________________________.
* Detail 1:____________________________________________________.
* Detail 2:____________________________________________________.
* Detail 3:____________________________________________________.

III. BODY PARAGRAPH II:
* Transition/Opening Sentence:_________________________________.
* Detail 1:____________________________________________________.
* Detail 2:____________________________________________________.
* Detail 3:____________________________________________________.

IV. BODY PARAGRAPH III:
* Transition/Opening Sentence:_________________________________.
* Detail 1:____________________________________________________.
* Detail 2:____________________________________________________.
* Detail 3:____________________________________________________.

V. BODY PARAGRAPH IV:
* Transition/Opening Sentence:_________________________________.
* Detail 1:____________________________________________________.
* Detail 2:____________________________________________________.
* Detail 3:____________________________________________________.

VI. CONCLUSION:
* Reconfirmed Thesis:_________________________________________.
 

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You've got some excellent advice in the above comments, but without knowing more about the class and the project itself I don't know if you are close or far away from having a finished paper. My frame of reference is skewed since I just finished my MBA recently, but I'm going to guess that regardless of the class you need to site references? I can't imagine that isn't something that is required, but I guess it's possible depending on the project.

A couple of notes that I hope help:

"Cigars in fact have the lowest nicotine content of any and all tobacco products out there."

Take out "in fact". It's a turn of phrase we've gotten used to in every day conversation, but it really doesn't have a place in a paper under most circumstances.

Your third paragraph is really kind of dangerous (to your paper, lol). You start off by saying how those teachers were wrong with their statements and then turn around and prove that they were correct (or close to it) with your statements about Swishers and Black and Milds. You have a point to make here, I'm just not sure it was done in the best possible way.

"That is one reason that there is such a negative outlook on members from one party to the other. " This statement seems out of place. I'm not sure what you are trying to say?

You may also need to be be careful with the paragraph that starts out "This brings us to another important question". Again, maybe I don't understand the purpose of the paper correctly, but without any other information:

"The liberals in the house and senate would ultimately like to get rid of the cigar bars, lounges, and smoke shops all together even though they will never admit to it."
The above is a completel unsubstantiated, and unprovable statement. It is an opinion, but you state it like a fact.

"Next in the eleven closest to Indiana is Kentucky; no surprise there, they used to be the leading state in tobacco exports just a few years ago. "
Extremely familiar tone and almost sarcastic. Again, depends on what you are going for here, but it doesn't read like a college level paper.

"It is not a surprise then that under a newly formed democratic-controlled government we are seeing more and more smoking bans and regulations take hold all over the country."
Be careful here, these are mostly STATE laws you are talking about, not Federal laws. Early in the paragraph you mention Obama passing laws, but you are talking about State-wide bans which are a State thing, not Federal, Obama wouldn't be involved with that.

ETA: What Dprice said!
 

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New I remembered seeing something else about this. Your post entitled, "Research Paper"

Okay so for my English 201 class we are starting an argument paper. We have to pick a narrow topic of argument and take a side and convince people to take our side. Im doing mine on the tobacco rights that American's should always be allowed to enjoy and all the misconceptions behind the leaf.
If this is truly a research paper, you need to show your work, bro'! That means siting all of those pieces of information that are not yours. Again, I don't know your teacher or your class, but that is pretty standard in academics so unless you've been told otherwise, you risk getting your paper torn apart by the Prof for not siting your references.

I know you just asked for titles, but you already have quite a few good suggestions and I'd rather you get a good grade than get a fiver from you. :thumbsup:
 
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FWIW guys, a number of you mentioned citing sources. If you reread the OP you'll notice he said he took the citations, etc out to make it more readable for us. I'm assuming they'll be in his submitted paper.
 

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FWIW guys, a number of you mentioned citing sources. If you reread the OP you'll notice he said he took the citations, etc out to make it more readable for us. I'm assuming they'll be in his submitted paper.
Whoopsie. Where the heck is the Embarrassed smiley!?!
 

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i cant thank you guys enough for all the advice...looking back at the 'finished' paper i realize that i just got caught up in it and it needs some editing...maybe ill post all my papers on here before i submit them LOL. and YES, i have an outline...

thanks again guys, i will make adjustments and repost this...im even thinking of starting a blog about these sorts of things since a few of you mentioned interest in reading one done by me. thanks again, ill make a title decision here within the week. you guys are awesome!
 
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